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Babe Ruth[,] [punctuation] through the brilliance of his performance and the force of his personality almost single-handedly transformed the game of baseball. He began his career as a pitcher for the Boston Red Sox and [proved to be] was an excellent hurler. Ruth’s hitting was also impressive [–], especially his power hitting [–]. [and the] The team began to use him to [their] [grammar] its advantage in the outfield [on days he was not scheduled to pitch], so he could hit on days he was not [scheduled to pitch] [avoid passive voice] on the pitching schedule.

Ruth discovered that he liked hitting and playing [everyday] [spelling] every day. He also enjoyed the cheers of the crowd [which] [grammar] that came whenever he launched a [big] [word choice] long one. Those cheers [and adulation of the crowd] [delete] [was] [grammar] were music to [the ears of Ruth] Ruth’s ears. The product of a working-class family in Baltimore responded to that adulation with ease. He loved the crowd and never shrank from being the center of attention. Always aware of his fame and the effect that he had on people, Ruth would put on a show. People came to the [ball park] [style] ballpark to see him hit home [runs but] [punctuation] runs, but [of course] [delete] they also came just to see him.

With such a marketable commodity, [one wonders] [delete] why did the Red Sox ever [traded] sell him to the New York Yankees [trademark][.]? The answer is money. Ruth would have helped the financial prospects of any team [in the long run] [delete], but Harry Frazee, the owner of the Red Sox [at the time] [delete], had a [crying] [delete] need for some immediate cash. He was a Broadway producer, and his shows were not doing well. [Approached by the owners of the New York Yankees [avoid passive voice],] When the owners of the New York Yankees approached him, Frazee readily accepted their offer to purchase Ruth’s contract in 1919 for [$100 thousand] [style] $100,000 in cash and $200,000 [more] [delete] in loans.

Ruth went to New York, and [the] that city, the [team] Yankees[,] [punctuation] and baseball itself [has] [grammar] have never been the same.

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Babe Ruth through his brilliant performance and forceful personality almost single-handedly transformed the game of baseball. He began his career as a pitcher for the Boston Red Sox and was an excellent hurler. Ruth’s hitting was also impressive, especially his power hitting. The team began to use him to its advantage in the outfield, so he could hit on days he was not on the pitching schedule.

Ruth discovered that he liked hitting and playing every day. He also enjoyed the cheers of the crowd that came whenever he launched a long one. Those cheers were music to Ruth’s ears. The product of a working-class family in Baltimore responded to that adulation with ease. He loved the crowd and never shrank from being the center of attention. Always aware of his fame and the effect that he had on people, Ruth would put on a show. People came to the ballpark to see him hit home runs, but they also came just to see him.

With such a marketable commodity, why did the Red Sox sell him to the New York Yankees? The answer is money. Ruth would have helped the financial prospects of any team, but Harry Frazee, the owner of the Red Sox, had a need for some immediate cash. He was a Broadway producer, and his shows were not doing well. When the owners of the New York Yankees approached him, Frazee readily accepted their offer to purchase Ruth’s contract in 1919 for $100,000 in cash and $200,000 in loans.

Ruth went to New York, and that city, the Yankees and baseball itself have never been the same.